Exercise 1: Analyze the strengths and weaknesses of a business communication. Re

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Exercise 1: Analyze the strengths and weaknesses of a business communication.

Read and analyze the following business communication:

As an organization, the North American Personal Motorsports Marketing Association has committed ourselves to helping our members—a diverse group of dealers of motorcycles, all-terrain vehicles, Snowmobiles, and personal watercraft—achieve their business objectives. Consequently, our organization, which usually goes under the initials NAPMMA, has the following aims, goals, and objectives. Firstly, we endeavor to aid and assist our members in reaching their business objectives. Second, NPMMA communicates (“lobbying” in slang terms) with local, state, and national governmental agencies and leaders on issues of importance to our members. And lastly, we educate the motorsports public, that being current motorsports which owners, and prospective owners of said vehicles, on the safe and enjoyable operations of they are vehicles.

Analyze the strengthes and weaknesses of each sentence using the following table as a formatting guide:

Revise the original paragraph using the guidelines for effective business communications that you learned in class.

Sentences Strengths Weaknesses As an organization, the North American Personal Motorsports Marketing Association has committed ourselves to helping our members—a diverse group of dealers of motorcycles, all-terrain vehicles, Snowmobiles, and personal watercraft—achieve their business objectives. Consequently, our organization, which usually goes under the initials NAPMMA, has the following aims, goals, and objectives. Firstly, we endeavor to aid and assist our members in reaching their business objectives. Second, NPMMA communicates (“lobbying” in slang terms) with local, state, and national governmental agencies and leaders on issues of importance to our members. And lastly, we educate the motorsports public, that being current motorsports which owners, and prospective owners of said vehicles, on the safe and enjoyable operations of they’re vehicles.

Explanation / Answer

Sentences

Strength

Weakness

Introducing NAPMMA goal in a very positive way.

It should avoid long sentences and make it short and meaningful.

Consequently, our organization, which usually goes under the initials NAPMMA, has the following aims, goals, and objectives.

Trying to get in to the point to illustrate its aim , goal and objectives.

Unnecessary introducing NAPMMA again.

Firstly, we endeavor to aid and assist our members in reaching their business objectives.

Clearly explain its aim.

Aim, goal and objectives should be put in bullet form to make the information more productive.

Second, NPMMA communicates (“lobbying” in slang terms) with local, state, and national governmental agencies and leaders on issues of importance to our members.

Explain its detail aim and goal in term of governmental agencies and to members.

Slang words should be avoided

And lastly, we educate the motorsports public that being current motorsports which owners, and prospective owners of said vehicles, on the safe and enjoyable operations of they’re vehicles.

The sentences are easy to understand.

Make the sentence short and to the point .Eliminate unnecessary informations.