YOUR TASK Study the following poorly written inter­view follow-up letter. In tea

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YOUR TASK Study the following poorly written inter­view follow-up letter. In teams or in a class discus­sion, list at least five weaknesses. It has problems with punctuation, wordiness, proofreading, capitalization, sentence structure, and other writing techniques you have studied.

1340 East Phillips Avenue

Apartment D

Littleton, CO 80126

June 17, 2018

Ms. Michelle Genovese

High Country Accounting

2810 East Sixth Avenue

Denver, CO 80218-3453

Dear Ms. Genovese:

It was altogether extremely enjoyable to talk with you about the open position at High Country Accounting. The position as you presented it seems to be a excellent match for my training and skills. The creative approach to Account Management that you described, confirmed my desire to work in a imaginative firm such as High County Accounting.

I would bring to the position strong organizational skills, and I have the ability to encourage others to work cooper­atively within the department. My training in analysis and application of accounting data and financial reporting; as well as my experience as a financial consultant in the mort­gage industry would enable me to help with the backlog of client projects that you mentioned.

I certainly understand your departments need for strong support in the administrative area. I am definitely atten­tive to details and my organizational skills will help to free you to deal with more pressing issues in the management area. I neglected to emphasize during our very interesting interview that I also have a minor in finance despite the fact that it was on my résumé.

Thanks for taking the time to interview me, and explain the goals of your agency along with the dutys of this position. As I am sure you noticed during the interview I am very interested in working for High Country Accounting because I need to get a job to start paying off my student loans, and look forward to hearing from you about this position. In the event that you might possibly need additional information from me or facts about me, all you need to do is shoot me an e-mail.

Sincerely,

Camille Montano

Explanation / Answer

Five weakness of this follow-up letter are

- This letter has problem in formatting. Like the header of address of both sender and receiver have not provided properly. It is difficult from the letter to establish who is the receiver and sender. While writting any official e-mail, the sender should take a note about formatting.

-Another major problem in the letter is that it has lack in continuity of the subject. The information should follow in a pattern so that reader can grasp the information and understand it. Here facts do not present logical flow.

-In terms of language and grammar this letter lacks in use of proper tense which can be followed while writting a letter. In some places past tense has been used where future tense could have been used.

- There is also spelling mistake in the letter. The writter should take proper care in spelling of the word.

- Another major problem is using of words. Some sentences can be curtailed by use of short and simple words.

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