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NOTE: Pay close attention to what you are being asked to do in each exercise, and do only as much revising as is necessary. Take special care to preserve the meaning of the original material. If necessary, invent reasonable details.
Note: The exercise numbers (16) differ from those in our textbook.
Ex 1: Refer to the advice in "Avoid Sentence Fragments," and rewrite each of the following sentences to eliminate sentence fragments.
Nine bones from a Pacific walrus that were found in a coffin beneath St. Pancras Railway Station in London.
The physical impossibility of knowing both the position and the momentum of a particle at the same time.
Ex 2: Refer to the advice in "Avoid Comma Splices," and rewrite each of the following sentences to eliminate comma splices.
Porsche has won the J. D. Power new-model satisfaction award more than any other carmaker, the German company is expected to win next year, too.
The federal Bureau of Safety and Environmental Enforcement is developing new regulations for offshore oil and gas operations in the Arctic, these regulations are expected to be ready for review later this year.
Ex 3: Refer to the advice in "Avoid Run-On Sentences," and rewrite each of the following sentences to eliminate run-ons.
A group of US scientists has encoded a 53,000-word book entirely in DNA this means DNA could become a future means of storing large amounts of data.
Now you can burn your digital music library to DVDs burning to DVDs gives you a significant increase in storage space (4.7 Gb for a standard DVD v. 700 Mb for a CD).
Ex 4: Refer to the advice in "Avoid Ambiguous Pronoun References," and rewrite each of the following sentences to eliminate ambiguous pronoun references.
Kathleen Norris is in charge of analyzing the summer-semester orientation session, which is expected to last five days.
The football program and the basketball programs are the highest grossing of the seventeen sports at the university. They posted revenues of $1.9 million last year.
Ex 5: Refer to the advice in "Compare Items Clearly," and rewrite each of the following sentences to eliminate unclear comparisons.
The experiences of children with disabilities differ from adults with disabilities.
Universities enter into contracts with food-service providers more than hospitals.
Ex 6: Refer to the advice in "Maintain Subject-Verb Agreement," and rewrite each of the following sentences so that it maintains subject-verb agreement.
Samples from the survey is subject to sampling and nonsampling errors.
The typical question received at our call centers are not answered in any of the user guides.
Ex 7: Refer to the advice in "Use Tenses Correctly," and rewrite each of the following sentences to eliminate incorrect use of tenses.
Galileo paid dearly for his belief that the Earth revolved around the Sun.
All the seminars finished by the time I arrived at 3:00 on Thursday afternoon.
Ex 8: Refer to the advice in "Choose An Appropriate Sentence Length," and break each sentence into two or more sentences.
If we get the contract, we must be ready by June 1 with the necessary personnel and equipment, so with this in mind a staff meeting, which all group managers are expected to attend, is scheduled for February 12.
Although we had a frank discussion with Backer’s legal staff, we were unable to get them to specify what they would be looking for in an out-of-court settlement, but they gave us a strong impression that they would rather settle out of court.
Ex 9: Refer to the advice in "Focus On The 'Real' Subject," and revise the sentences so that the real subjects appear prominently.
There has been a decrease in the number of students enrolled in our training sessions.
The use of in-store demonstrations has resulted in a dramatic increase in business.
Ex 10: Refer to the advice in "Focus On The 'Real' Verb," and revise the sentences to focus on the real verb.
Pollution constitutes a threat to the Matthews Wildlife Preserve.
Evaluation of the gumming tendency of the four tire types will be accomplished by comparing the amount of rubber that can be scraped from the tires.
Ex 11: Refer to the advice in "Use Parallel Structure," and revise the following sentences to eliminate non-parallelism.
The next two sections of the manual discuss how to analyze the data, the conclusions that can be drawn from your analysis, and how to decide what further steps are needed before establishing a journal list.
In the box, we should include a copy of the documentation, the cables, and the docking station.
Ex 12: Refer to the advice in "Select An Appropriate Level Of Formality," and revise the following informal sentences to make them moderately formal.
The biggest problem faced by multimedia designers is that users freak if they don’t see a button—or, heaven forbid, if they have to make up their own buttons!
If the University of Arizona can’t figure out where to dump its low-level radioactive waste, Uncle Sam could pull the plug on millions of dollars of research grants.
Ex 13: Refer to the advice in "Use Positive Constructions," and revise the following sentences to convert the negative constructions to positive constructions.
Management accused Williams of filing trip reports that were not accurate.
We must make sure that all our representatives do not act unprofessionally to potential clients.
Ex 14: Refer to the advice in "Be Concise," and revise the following sentences to eliminate the obvious material.
To register to take a course offered by the university, you must first determine whether the university will be offering that course that semester.
The starting date of the project had to be postponed for a certain period of time due to a delay in obtaining the necessary authorization from the Project Oversight Committee.
Ex 15: Refer to the advice in "Avoid Filler," and revise the following sentences to remove meaningless filler.
For all intents and purposes, our company’s long-term success depends to a certain degree on various factors that are in general difficult to foresee.
The presentation was generally well received for the most part, despite the fact that we received a rather small number of questionnaire responses.
Ex 16: Refer to the advice in "Avoid Wordy Phrases," and revise the following sentences to make them more concise.
The instruction manual for the new copier is lacking in clarity and completeness.
We remain in communication with our sales staff on a weekly basis.
Explanation / Answer
Ex 1:
Nine bones from a Pacific walrus were found in a coffin beneath St Pancras Railway Station in London. Having knowledge about the position and momentum of a particle, at the same time, is physically impossible.
Ex 2:
The J. D. Power new-model satisfaction award has been won by Porsche the most. The German car company is expected to win this year as well.
The federal Bureau of Safety and Environmental Enforcement is developing new regulations for offshore oil and gas operations in the Arctic. These regulations are expected to be ready for review later this year.
Ex 3:
A group of US scientists has encoded a 53,000-word book entirely in DNA. This means DNA could become a future means of storing large amounts of data.
Now you can burn your digital music library to DVDs. Burning to DVDs gives you a significant increase in storage space (4.7 Gb for a standard DVD v. 700 Mb for a CD).
Ex 4:
Kathleen Norris is in charge of analyzing the summer-semester orientation session. This session is expected to last five days.
The football program and the basketball programs are the highest grossing of the seventeen sports at the university. The programs posted revenues of $1.9 million last year.
Ex 5:
The experiences of children with disabilities differ from the experiences of adults with disabilities.
Universities tend to enter into contracts with food service providers more than the rate at which hospitals enter into contracts with the providers.
Ex 6:
Galileo had to pay dearly for his belief that the Earth revolved around the Sun.
All the seminars had finished by the time I arrived at 3:00 on Thursday afternoon.
Ex 8:
If we get the contract, we must be ready by June 1 with the necessary personnel and equipment. A staff meeting, which all group managers are expected to attend, is scheduled for February 12.
Although we had a frank discussion with Backer’s legal staff, we were unable to get them to specify what they would be looking for in an out-of-court settlement. However they gave us a strong impression that they would rather settle out of court.
Ex 9:
The number of students, enrolled in our training sessions, has substantially decreased.
In-store demonstrations have resulted in a dramatic increase in business.
Ex 10:
Matthews Wildlife Preserve faces constant threat due to pollution.
The gumming tendency of the four tire types will be evaluated by comparing the amount of rubber that can be scraped from the tires.
Ex 11:
The next two sections of the manual discuss how to analyze the data, how to conclude from the analysis and how to decide what further steps are needed before establishing a journal list.
In the box, we should include a copy of the documentation, a copy of the cables, and a copy of the docking station.
Ex 12:
The biggest problem faced by multimedia designers is that users freak if they don’t see a button.
If the University of Arizona can’t figure out where to dump its low-level radioactive waste, research grants could be pulled off
Ex 13:
Management accused Williams of filing trip reports that were inaccurate.
We must make sure that all our representatives act professionally to potential clients.
Ex 14:
To register for a course, the university must be offering that course that semester.
The starting date of the project had to be postponed due to a delay in obtaining the necessary authorization from the Project Oversight Committee.
Ex 15:
Our company’s long-term success depends to a certain degree on various factors that are difficult to foresee.
The presentation was generally well received, despite the fact that we received a rather small number of questionnaire responses.
Ex 16:
The instruction manual for the new copier lacks in clarity and completeness.
We communicate with our sales staff on a weekly basis.
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