Exercises for better understanding of the Discussion Consider the two different

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Exercises for better understanding of the Discussion Consider the two different opening paragraphs of a discussion about a preventive measure against malaria. Which one is a better first paragraph for a Discussion and why? Revise one of the two versions, using 'Review' Tracking, track changes (ON), and Final Showing Markup options in MS Word. Send this revised version. VERSION A We trapped and counted the number of mosquitoes within the urban environment of the city of Caracas using conventional carbon dioxide traps. Nearly 70% higher numbers of adult A. aegypti were caught in settlements in the vicinity of irrigated urban agricultural sites compared to control areas without irrigated urban agriculture. When we evaluated malaria episode report from people living in various parts of the city, we found that 18% of malaria cases were reported by people living in the vicinity of urban agricultural areas in the rainy as well as dry season, whereas only 2% of the control groups reported incidences of malaria per year. VERSION B: The results of this study show that open-space irrigated vegetable fields in Caracas can provide suitable breeding sites for A. aegypti. This is reflected in higher number of adult A. aegypti in settlements in the vicinity of irrigated urban agricultural sites compared to control areas without irrigated urban agriculture. In addition, people living in the vicinity of urban agriculture areas reported more malaria episodes than the control in the rainy as well as dry season. Apparently, the informal irrigation sites of the urban agricultural locations create rural spots within the city of Caracas in terms of potential mosquito breeding sites

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Version A mostly describes the results obtained in the study.

Version B is better suited for the discussion about preventive measures. The discussion part must provide analytical depth of the observations recorded. It must include the observations with respect to the available literature providing a 'big picture' perspective with the importance of the study.

Edited Version B:

Version B:

The results of this study show that open space irrigated vegetable fields in Caracas can provide suitable breeding sites for A. aegypti. This is reflected in the higher number of adult A. aegypti in settlements in the vicinity of irrigated urban agricultural sites compared to control areas without irrigated urban agriculture. In addition, people living in the vicinity of urban agriculture areas reported more malaria episodes than the control in the rain as well as dry seasons. Apparently, the informal irrigation sites of the urban agricultural locations create rural spots within the city of Caracas in terms of potential mosquito breeding sites.

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